Final: Formal Self-Introduction
To: Ms Shirley Alexander
From: Athena Benedict
Date: 28th January 2019
Subject: Athena Benedict : A self introduction
From: Athena Benedict
Date: 28th January 2019
Subject: Athena Benedict : A self introduction
Dear Ms. Alexander,
I am writing this email to introduce myself to you. My
name is Athena and I graduated with
a diploma in Integrated Events Management in polytechnic. I am currently a Year 2 student pursuing a degree in
Hospitality Business at the Singapore Institute of Technology. This year, I
will begin my internship in the Front Office Department at The Warehouse
Hotel. In the following paragraphs, I will share my
strengths and weaknesses in communication and my goals for this module.
In an industry that is service centric where kindness
and empathy is valued, I have learnt the need to be bold with expressing
my many thoughts. I think of
myself as a conversationalist as I enjoy sharing experiences and learning about
the world from outside my own perspective. However, this brings about a lack in
clarity as I express my thoughts haphazardly. It has the potential to either
confuse or upset another person and this goes against the idea of putting
others before self. Therefore, through this module, I hope to be able to better organize my
thoughts and understand the process behind effective communication to create
and maintain better relationships with the peers around me.
In my desire for strong connections and conversations, I struggle to understand the correct timing to interject my opinions or experiences. Thus, I hope to understand the timing flow in a conversation. For instance, understanding the Johari Window has enabled me to question my self-awareness.
In my desire for strong connections and conversations, I struggle to understand the correct timing to interject my opinions or experiences. Thus, I hope to understand the timing flow in a conversation. For instance, understanding the Johari Window has enabled me to question my self-awareness.
Thank you for taking your time to read about
me and I am extremely grateful for the guidance you are willing to provide
through this module. I look forward to these lessons because of the practical
tips I am learning every week. I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Athena Benedict
Hi Athena, your thoughts resonate with me. Passionate thoughts get mixed up, and delivery could affect how much of the message actually comes across. We can work on this in class.
ReplyDeleteContent- I see that you love to mix and mingle; natural born skills in hospitality. You also have a theme for your subject line: Athena: The Social Butterfly.
Such a personal statement presents an opportunity to build a personal brand and story. You have chosen a core value that is essentially your best skill, and alongside you have attempted to introduce your education, professional and communication background. The social butterfly story should become a central idea from the get-go as it is positioning you; this branding quite accurately reflects the hospitality context of mixing, mingling, meeting and greeting. So use it to define your topic sentences as you trace your education, professional and communication pathways.
Structure
Paras can benefit from being tied to the overall subject line of ‘social butterfly’ with more related and relevant topic sentences that will bring out the social butterfly story within each para.
If a chosen and desired career e.g. front office, sales, marketing or events were clearer, your branding will become more targeted. Then based on the suite of skills that career required, you can develop the social butterfly angle.
Writing has hints of a personal voice. All the best on developing your social brand.
Shirley